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They Point I's the Wrong Way by ~MissUnderstand:iconMissUnderstand:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


I admit,

Adamant, in ad mint:
don’t know how to say,
       -- What to say,
about the play.
And in what way?

Want to talk?!
      not block
         your rock
Your rock was...
(I), miss ‘cause
my name is Weak.

I wish to seek,
and find,
That which made
             knees weak.
     But I’s are blind.

For you un-encompass
     all which you portray.
Pointed the wrong way,
      as have always been
              You win.
                 Cause sin.

                I lose,
         confuse,
   my muse.
©2008 ~MissUnderstand
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~Haylale:iconHaylale: May 5, 2008, 6:54:00 PM
I am going out on a limb guessing here, but you like rap perhaps?

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I'm a poet and dint know it!
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~Haylale:iconHaylale: May 5, 2008, 8:14:28 PM
well rap is good if done well
in my opinion few do it well

Rage Against the Machine and Red Hot Chili Peppers imo are some of the very few who can do it well

:)

--
I'm a poet and dint know it!
~MissUnderstand:iconMissUnderstand: May 5, 2008, 9:07:23 PM
Haha.
Many would disagree with you on the Rage.
But Okay.
I do like the peppers though.

--
----
I'm not going to ask you to,
but it would be nice,
if my gallery had visit from you.
~Haylale:iconHaylale: May 5, 2008, 10:29:41 PM
:P

--
I'm a poet and dint know it!
~skerd22:iconskerd22: Jun 4, 2008, 4:57:15 PM
Still digging the rhymes.

I've been meaning to ask about the "I's" thing, though. Is that "eyes" or "more than one I"?
~MissUnderstand:iconMissUnderstand: Jun 4, 2008, 5:31:34 PM
Aha...
Thank you for noticing the I's!!
I was waiting for someone to ask.
It's kind of a play on words.
Could be multiple I's, since others may relate to the situation.
could also be pun of eyes and I's,
depending on how I use it in the poem...
Take it how you want to take it though.

--
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I'm not going to ask you to,
but it would be nice,
if my gallery had visit from you.
~skerd22:iconskerd22: Jun 4, 2008, 7:42:07 PM
Clever, indeed.
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